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Forum post:!: :!: That organ is piercing my soul.
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write a feel-good song with happy lyrics and upbeat music
Friday the 13th (Virgo Power)
It was a super flower blood moon
Our eyes met across the room
A pair of black cats crossed our path
You had your hat on backwards
Put your shoes on the table
We lit three smokes to a match
How does Fri-i-i-i-i-i-i-i-day
become Fri-i-i-i-i-i-i-i-yay
when that Friday was the everloving day
I met you, I met you
I broke a few mirrors
You may have killed a ladybug
And opened an umbrella inside
We walked under a ladder
Hung our horseshoe upside down
Saw a bird pass from left to right
How does Fri-i-i-i-i-i-i-i-day
become Fri-i-i-i-i-i-i-i-yay
because Friday was the everloving day
the 13th, the 13th
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How does Fri-i-i-i-i-i-i-i-day
become Fri-i-i-i-i-i-i-i-yay
because Friday was the everloving day
the 13th, the 13th
the 13th
SpoilerFun fact: there are (coincidentally) 9 notes in the run on Friday/Friyay and I learned (thanks, Wikipedia!) that 9 is considered an unlucky number in Japan. Well, it's been my LUCKY number since I was very little. Take that, Japan! (PS I see Lichen Throat has already included it.) Also, hat on backwards is not an unlucky thing that I know of but I decided it's kind of douche move so I made it one.
:!: :!: That organ is piercing my soul.
I like this, although your minimalist style always takes me a while to come around to. I do think this could be better with a little more going on in the arrangement but I think what's there is good.
Another cliche-fest yay. After hearing the millionth person sing about cats and ladders I'm seriously regretting this choice of title. This is crazy loud and while I quite like the twinkles they quickly start to hurt my ears. Using your EQ to ring out that instrument and remove the aggressive frequency would've helped. There are some off-key and slightly out of time vocals.
I love the "friyay". Some of the vocals are pretty rough takes. The chorus shows good sensibilities. Execution: D, concept: C+, hooks: C+
The omnichord/drum machine arrangement reminds me of Lael Neale. This does seem like another list of unlucky things and overall the writing and recording feel a bit rushed. The vocals at the beginning sound like they are fighting to catch up with the backing but improve once you settle into the performance. It does feel a little like it doesn't really go anywhere arrangement-wise though.
I found this more compelling than I think I probably should have. Did NOT like the lyrics in the "Fri-yay" line as it feels like something I'd see printed on a plaque in Home Goods or Marshalls, but I enjoyed the other lyrics despite the kind of "list of bad things" nature of them that I've complained about in other reviews--you curated a good, interesting-sounding set of unlucky things, so those parts actually do work for me. The main issue I had is that the arrangement is just too minimalist for me. I like the omnichord, but really I wanted more stuff going on in the mix--this just sounds like it took about 5 minutes to make as a demo and you weren't done with it yet. I think you could do better--if you can play omnichord you can fake up a few more instruments on keyboard, or multitrack some different parts with the omnichord, or just pull everything back so it feels intentional that it's so empty. But I found the melody and chord progression in the chorus a lot more memorable and appealing than in many of the other songs that felt more finished and fully realized, that major to minor movement is cool.
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