I wind up saying this about just every BYD song I hear, but it keeps being true, so here goes: The delivery of the lyrics is just too hammy, like you know you're telling jokes... but it's not funny. Part of it is that the hacky rhymes in the shouting sections feel very forced, and making something feel stilted and artificial is a great way to kill comedy. Instead of laughing at the situation of the character, or the "unexpected" turnarounds, I'm wondering why these phrases are put together so awkwardly. I'd love to hear you two try something totally deadpan for once - I bet that style would be much more effective.

I like the circus sounding organ... the rest of it doesn't work for me. Rather than amusing it comes across as annoying.

Timing is a bit lax in places. I'm pretty sure the piratesque harmonies don't work musically at all, or are just way out of tune, but somehow they work in practice. Any toilet humour loses infinity points with me. Where's the shouting?