I feel like you're borrowed the scale melody singing from round 0. This is much more coherent as a song than that one, though the mixing and mastering could be better. I enjoy the stops and what you've done with the call/response. The arrangement of instrumentation is surprisingly effective. I think I have one useful takeaway from this song - maybe you should avoid singing in your lower register.
It’s cool how you have the repeating synth phrases syncopating with each other. Much like Cavedweller’s entry last week I think this is the song that requires the most listens to hear everything that’s going on. After a few spins I feel like I remember the song but I’d struggle to sing any of it back to you. It’s interesting how the vocals in the middle section sound like a completely different person to the rest of the song, and in a different room, having listened to the lyrics closer that makes sense now and I do like the little reveal in this section. Probably a few of us can identify with this.
When I first heard this, I was not interested in that weird almost 8-bit take on an 80s action theme tune. But a couple of listens later, I think this is one of the most interesting takes musically this round. The words are OK, nothing special - m majorproblem is that I'm not sure the vocal style as chosen adds more than it distracts. It's a tad over-ornate. But the song's imaginative and catchy. Bonus points for that.
The opening sounds like something from an 8-bit videogame. Liked the music & vocals were ok. What I’d like to see done is replacing the last 2 lines of the first verse with the last 2 of the 2nd….then just getting rid of the 2nd verse. You spend too much time explaining how boring these suits are. Get it done in 1 verse so your song doesn’t start to get boring. Then write another verse about the secrets you mentioned in the 3rd verse.
Getting a video game music vibe again from the fake instruments. Everything's sounding very mono/up-the-middle, more panning of more elements would be nice. I'm glad you're singing more than speak-singing this time, I don't love the speak-singing. I like that your melody is covering your full vocal range and you're covering a wide range but your higher register sounds a little quavery. This is often a bit too frenetic for me but overall I also don't dislike this one. WTF?!?!
maybe you should avoid singing in your lower register.
your higher register sounds a little quavery.
The people have spoken!
maybe you should avoid singing in your lower register.
your higher register sounds a little quavery.
The people have spoken!
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That's awesome.
The synth arpeggio is neat. Vocals are a bit rough. You gave me a little information, but not enough: what are your secrets? Reminds me of the show Incorporated. That guy had secrets.
You spend too much time explaining how boring these suits are. Get it done in 1 verse so your song doesn’t start to get boring. Then write another verse about the secrets you mentioned in the 3rd verse.
You gave me a little information, but not enough: what are your secrets? Reminds me of the show Incorporated. That guy had secrets.
What I was trying (apparently, not very successfully) to get at was that the singer in the bridge could be any of the "Elevator Men" - they (we) each think that they're (we're) complex, multi-faceted people forced into this corporate role, whereas everyone else is a soulless drone. So the singer's specific "secrets" don't really matter: they're just the parts of him that let him see himself as a complete human being and not just a suit.
Anyway, congrats and good luck to everyone who is moving on. To my fellow eliminatees - I enjoyed both your songs and am sorry to see you get the ax.