this sounds like a lot of work went into it, but the harmony non-rhymes feel a bit like they're signposting the gag a bit too heavily, especially since they crop up every single time. It's a solid track and you're doing good vocal work here but it just feels a little one-note, and the solo doesn't feel like a good genre fit to me.

The way you've handled this challenge is amazing. Well played. It's kind of hard to hear the lyrics at times, especially at times when you go for low notes. You might consider pushing a little harder with your diaphragm on those low notes to get them a bit more audible, more breath support can help (what I think is) near the bottom of your range. You might also, if you want to fix it in post, just slice off that one word and boost the clip gain a bit. Little scansion issue on "cuSHY". Solo feels a little rough and aimless.

Clever, goofy take and I think you executed it well lyrically, but ultimately it just felt like a joke song without lasting value on repeat listens. I also think it could have been like half as long and still worked as well. It's pleasant to listen to in the parts where it's going (reminds me of Yo La Tengo's version of "Griselda") but even if you're just listening in the background, the punchline lines take you out of the song sonically. The lead vocal is hard to make out and sounds a bit weird in spots, I don't know if it was just aggressive comping or a noise gate or something but it sounds cut off strangely in various places. I'm not into this solo, doesn't seem to fit the style of the rest of the song at all. I think if you hadn't leaned quite so hard on telegraphing the jokes, it could have been more of a dry, funny, tongue-in-cheek take that would only reveal itself upon repeat listens instead of basically a novelty song.

This is a fun take on the challenge but, unfortunately, the joke does wear a little thin. I think maybe there needs to be less telegraphed rhyme switches and they should be dotted throughout the song, so that the listener doesn't know when they're coming. Production and performance are both good here, though I'm not sure about the very rocky solo in what is an otherwise quite folky tune.